"look at yourself," that should mean something. Why do you have to wait for other people to point out the error for you??? you don't have that ability? Yes, you do! What's happened when you don't have people to check it for you?
American might be afraid of showing others' mistakes because they don't want to offend others. But it's not my way to live.
You know what? When I type every thread, I always consider who I am writing to. If that person is okay in my opinion, I will care whether they see what I write or not; otherwise, why should I care???
okay, if you want me to show your mistakes, I have no reason to refuse.
- "When we choose doing st, we gain some & loss some.": I am not sure that this is a typo or not. "loss" is a noun; here you use it as a verb.
- "That's what it is when u'r choosing ur path " Is it more suitable if you use "how it is" instead?
- "it's group of ppl with more power, or the majority, would decide it" Did you recognize that there are 2 main verbs in the sentence?
- "the more ppl would think what u said are right": "what you said" is a singular noun, no matter how much you said.
PS: an essay of 4.5 or 5.0 is still lower than an essay of 6
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